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Title: Transformers: Interpersonal Skills
Universe: G1
Pairings: None
Rating: G
Warnings: None
Author's Note: The Seekers discuss a run-in with a pair of infamous twins. This is a Flash Fan Fiction Friday entry, for the theme "Provoked." I tried something new with this; I didn't use any dialogue tags. Or anything but dialogue. I'm hoping the readers will be able to pick up on who's who. Word count: 262



"I don't know why you two're so upset."

"Really, 'Warp? No idea?"

"They're called the 'Twin Terrors' for a reason. They were gonna attack us anyway, TC."

"You provoked them. Deliberately."

"Nuh-uh. I merely commented on their choice of paint colors."

"You compared Sunstreaker's yellow to the slime trail of an Altrectian mud slug."

"He took it completely wrong. Those trails are quite lustrous."

"And Sideswipe's paint is 'like the external digestive juices of Xess'an night beast.'"

"Yeah? That red glop is actually quite brilliant and shiny. I don't know why they both got so upset."

"Gee, you compare them to slime and bile, and wonder why they don't like it."

"Those two are just overly sensitive."

"Will you two shut up? It's bad enough I have to fly in this condition. I don't wish to add audio torture to my list of pains."

"Apparently, the twins aren't the only sensitive ones. Y'know, Screamer, you're not the only one who got judoed."

"Don't call me that!"

"My point, 'Warp, is maybe we might not have been 'judoed' so vigorously if you hadn't opened that mouth of yours."

"This is Skywarp you're discussing. He is incapable of not opening his mouth."

"Maybe you should try shutting yours, Screamer!"

"Do. Not. Call. Me. That!"

"Again, 'Warp, if you could control your vocalizer, you'd get in less trouble. Honestly, you have the interpersonal skills of Grimlock."

"Hey! Well, at least that's still better than Screamer."
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This is my Flash Fan Fiction Friday entry for :iconliteraryfanfiction:. The theme is "Provoked."

I tried something new with this one. I didn't use any dialogue tags, or any identifiers at all (besides the Seekers using each others names). I hope it works. It's an experiment to see if I can write clearly enough that my readers will recognize the different characters without the tags. Hopefully, it's not confusing. ^^;

Transformers and all associated names are registered trademarks of Hasbro. My work is in no way affiliated with or endorsed by Hasbro. All Hail Hasbro! :salute:
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Mood: Love ~FanCandyMedia Jan 13, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
I got who was who! :la: I really enjoyed this piece, it definitely got a laugh out of me... I can SO see this. (it actually reminds me of some conversation me and my friends have had...)
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=SingingFlames Jan 13, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
You and your friends were judoed? J/K :giggle: Thanks! I'm happy the "all dialogue" approach wasn't confusing. (I was a bit worried when I posted it.)

Thanks for the fav!
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~FanCandyMedia Jan 14, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Well no, I was more referring to the fact that one has like zero social skills, and so can be a bit blunt (and would totally compare someone's outfit to slim or bile and consider it a compliment).
No, I didn't find it confusing at all!! It was surprising to be able to recognize a character just by the way they say things...
You're welcome, by the way! (p.s. I recommended your "All For One" series to a friend who wanted to read some Command Trine stories!! I'm sure she'll love them!)
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=SingingFlames Jan 14, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Well, hopefully your friend doesn't run into a pair of Lambo twins and say anything too bad. ;)

Thanks for recommending them! :happybounce: I hope she likes them. :D
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~FanCandyMedia Jan 25, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Haha, I think she's safe... for now.

No prob!! I'm pretty sure she'll like them, but I'll ask her!
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lol This was really neat. I liked your idea of getting rid of description all together and just making a dialogue piece. That's a great way to save on words and get right to the point.
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=SingingFlames Jan 13, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks! It definitely helped on word count, but presented its own problems. I tried not to be blatantly obvious that they were using each others names more than normal. ^^; But, at certain spots, I couldn't think of anyway to be clear of who was who without them saying names.

It was a fun challenge, but I'm not sure how often (if ever) I do the "all dialogue" route again. Maybe a lot of dialogue. We'll see. ;)
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:iconlaramus-prime:
It felt pretty natural when I was reading it, actually. Since it's dialogue, you read it in much more of a "stream-of-conciousness" manner, and it seemed to flow pretty smoothly.

Yeah, I wouldn't reccamend it all the time, but it was a cool experiment.
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=SingingFlames Jan 14, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
You know, I hadn't thought of it that way, but the "stream of consciousness" makes sense. I guess, as the writer, I read it differently. It's hard for me to step back, and just read my work. I see all the little bits and how I tried to fit them together. I'm very bias (and prejudiced) when it comes to my own stuff.

You know, I like experimenting with my writing (like this), even if it's something I may not use again (or, at least, so drastically). =P
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:iconlaramus-prime:
Well, it's good that you're a tough critic when it comes to your own work. Still, I think there comes a point where you need to admit to yourself that you're good.

I'm glad you experimented with this, since it came out really well. I'll considder trying it myself in a future 4f.
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